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 6/11/2009 3:55 PM
 
 Modified By [jazz]x  on 6/17/2009 10:29:46 AM

Holaaa :) This would be my first fic; your opinion would be lovely :D

"People change, seasons change
And for that alone we have the hands of time to blame"
 
intro:
            H A V E N
            If I see another cow passing by at eighty miles an hour, I will scream.
            I closed my eyes and pressed my forehead against the window, knowing that another cow was going to pass by pretty soon, and I wasn’t really in a screaming mood. For one, my head felt like it was being hit both upside and downside by a hammer the size of a baby elephant, and secondly, my sister Sara would verbally whoop my backside for screaming while she was taking her afternoon nap. She was younger than me, though—I could probably take her.
            Sighing, I finally resigned to just sleeping, something that I rarely did, mostly due to the fact that I usually woke up twelve hours later, only to find that I’d been left alone on the bus, scared and confused, with absolutely no knowledge of where everyone else went. “We wanted to let you get some rest” and “Oh, you were back there?” were the usual responses I got.
            But nevertheless, I was tired and extremely bored, so I decided to be proactive about the situation and solve the problem before there was one.  I grabbed my phone, which was resting on the windowsill, and sent a text to both Joe and Sara, letting them know I was taking a nap and to wake me whenever the bus stopped somewhere. I contemplated sending one to my older brother, Alex, but I figured he was probably still upset with me after the fight we’d had earlier that day.
            “Joe and Sara it is,” I sighed, typing up the message.
            It didn’t take long for either of them to respond.  
Sara:
What makes you think it’s okay to interrupt my nap just so you can tell me you’re about to take one of your own?
Joseph <3:
Sure thing, babe. :) love you; sweet dreams!
 
            I smiled and replied to both texts (“ Just shut up and do it :P” for Sara and “Aweh, thanks baby! Love you too! (:” for Joe), then switched my phone to “silent” and placed it under my pillow. Closing my eyes, I finally let the exhaustion of the past week sink in and grab hold of me. It wasn’t long before I was completely gone, off into my own little world of dreams and fairytales.
 
                        N I C K
            Screaming. So loud.  Stop the screaming.
                                    Sirens… sirens?
Why the sirens? Is someone hurt?
                  Crying—no, sobbing.
Heart-breaking sobs.
Heart-stomping sobs.
Mom?
                                    “Nick?”
Someone saying my name.
            “NICHOLAS!”
                        Someone screaming my name.
It’s me—I’m hurt.
 

Quote at the beginning is from "Things are Different Now" by Carnal's Rejection.


love kevin.
loveloveLOVE nick.
♥ joe siggiess ;)
The Hands of Time; fic by Jazz (:
^click it!^
i survived cherub bootcamp (:
She loves the sun 'cause it proves she's not alone, and the world doesn't revolve around your soul. She loves the sky 'cause it validates her pride; never lets her know when she is wrong. And the black keys never looked so beautiful. And a perfect rainbow never seemed so dull. And the lights out never had this bright a glow. And the black keys are showin' me a world I never knew.
07.29.09 ♥
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 6/11/2009 4:00 PM
 
whoaaaaa!!!!
okay so what is wrong with Nick
Nicholas.....
he's hurt?!?!?!
you can't just leave it there.
you have to post more

NICHOLASSS <3
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 6/11/2009 4:02 PM
 

Haha, I'm pretty sure you read this before I even got the parts up, lol.
But yeah, I like cliff hangers. They're fun :)


love kevin.
loveloveLOVE nick.
♥ joe siggiess ;)
The Hands of Time; fic by Jazz (:
^click it!^
i survived cherub bootcamp (:
She loves the sun 'cause it proves she's not alone, and the world doesn't revolve around your soul. She loves the sky 'cause it validates her pride; never lets her know when she is wrong. And the black keys never looked so beautiful. And a perfect rainbow never seemed so dull. And the lights out never had this bright a glow. And the black keys are showin' me a world I never knew.
07.29.09 ♥
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 6/11/2009 4:07 PM
 
what can i say i was excited :p
its so good. (:
cliffhangers are fun for you...
those of us who have to wait for more...
not so much :p

NICHOLASSS <3
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ily Girls <3
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 6/11/2009 4:31 PM
 

[jazz]x wrote


            Sighing, I finally resigned to just sleeping, something that I rarely did, mostly due to the fact that I usually woke up twelve hours later, only to find that I’d been left alone on the bus, scared and confused, with absolutely no knowledge of where everyone else went. “We wanted to let you get some rest” and “Oh, you were back there?” were the usual responses I got.
           

Love ittt!!! You have no idea how many times I've missed a family movie night or something because no one bothered to wake me up/tell me...So great.

So, this is super duper good so far. You write very well and have a great vocabulary (hope that doesn't sound weird...) and I can't wait for more.

What happened?? I'm very worried about Nick.

~Arem~ [thanks again for the part...definitely have a goofy grin on my face]


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 6/11/2009 7:14 PM
 

I loved it. Poor Nick, I hopehe doesn't get hurt to bad. :) You did a wonderful job.

~Stella


Black Keys 2
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 6/11/2009 7:47 PM
 

That was amazing! You write really well. I can't wait for more. Bump!

Hailey


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 6/11/2009 11:01 PM
 

Aweh! Thanks for the comments, guys! :D
Anyway, I'm trying so hard to focus on chapter one.
But I just watched Gran Torino, and it was flippin' sad :(
I'm tryna get my mind right before I write, lol.

Aimee: Haha, thanks. I'm glad you find it so good (:
I agree with you about the cliff hangers, though.

Arem: Dude, I always miss stuff too.
Glad you can relate so well.
The whole vocab thing isn't too weird :)
So thanks!

Stella & Hailey: Thanks so much girls!
I really appreciate both your comments :D


love kevin.
loveloveLOVE nick.
♥ joe siggiess ;)
The Hands of Time; fic by Jazz (:
^click it!^
i survived cherub bootcamp (:
She loves the sun 'cause it proves she's not alone, and the world doesn't revolve around your soul. She loves the sky 'cause it validates her pride; never lets her know when she is wrong. And the black keys never looked so beautiful. And a perfect rainbow never seemed so dull. And the lights out never had this bright a glow. And the black keys are showin' me a world I never knew.
07.29.09 ♥
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 6/12/2009 8:02 AM
 
sometimes love comes around
and it knocks you down.
(:
stuck in my head :p
bumpp

NICHOLASSS <3
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ily Girls <3
PM: DanceInTheRain
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 6/12/2009 2:22 PM
 

 

Mkay, chapter one is finito!
Read, enjoy, comment... please (:
PRE-DIASTER
one:
Baby I can’t wait to get next to you
Oh, I can’t wait to wrap my arms around your body
H A V E N
            “Haven, where are you?” Alex’s angry voice reverberated off the concrete walls backstage.
            I opened my eyes, then closed them again, ignoring Alex as he rampaged up and down the hallways, calling my name. Joe, obviously deciding not to follow my example, pulled away slightly, the grip he had on my waist loosening some. My mouth stayed pressed to his, however, and I gently ran my fingers through his hair, refusing to let Alex’s tantrum interrupt my alone time with Joe. It only took Joe a few minutes to surrender, and his grip on my waist soon returned to it’s usual, firm hold.
            “Haven, get out here—now!” Alex yelled, sounding angrier than before. Joe broke the kiss this time and completely released me from his hold, sighing as he did.
            “No,” I muttered, grabbing him by the front of his shirt. I pulled him closer, wrapping my arms around his neck. “Just ignore him.”
            He scoffed and raised his eyebrows, pushing some of my hair out of my face. “And be forced to face the wrath of an extremely pissed off, overly protective older brother?” he said, mockingly. “Psh, you may be an excellent kisser—and by excellent, I mean mind-blazingly fantastic—but you’re not worth my life.”
            I laughed, but managed a small pout. “You wouldn’t risk your life just so I could spend a few extra minutes with my boyfriend, who I never get to see due to his crazy and extremely hectic schedule?”
            “Never see me?” he asked, one eyebrow raised. “You see me everyday, Haven. Did you forget for a second that we both—along with Nick—begged our parents for weeks, trying to convince them to let you and Sara come on tour with us?”
            I rolled my eyes. “Yeah, and while we all got our wish, we also got like, the worst condition ever…”
            “Haven! I’m not kidding. GET. OUT. HERE.”
            “…my extremely irritating and annoying brother with horrible timing.”
            Joe softly brushed his lips against the nape of my neck, kicking up butterflies in the pit of my stomach. I closed my eyes and sighed happily—I loved being this close to him. He sighed in response to my sigh and pressed his forehead against mine. “You know I would love nothing more than to spend some extra time with you, Ali. You are seriously the most amazing person I know, but…I mean, when we started dating you knew that me and my brothers would be—”
            “I know,” I said, interrupting him. I reached down and grabbed one of his hands, entwining my fingers with his. “That doesn’t stop me from missing you, though.”
            Joe grinned and pressed his lips to mine once more, allowing himself to give into my whining for a few quick moments. It ended all too quickly, however, and he soon pulled away again, slipping off the couch. I still refused to move, instead watching as Joe ruffled his hair and smirked at me. “You know Shelby’s gonna have to restyle this because you, for whatever reason, can’t leave it alone.”
            “Send her my sincerest apologies,” I said, smiling and hopping off the couch. Shelby was always fussing me out, complaining about how long it takes to get the guys’ perfect. “It’s just so soft.”
            He chuckled and pushed me gently toward the door. “Out,” he demanded, his hand on the door knob. “Alex is going to come storming in here any second now, and I don’t want him to know that—”
            “We just spent the last hour and half swapping spit, when you’re actually supposed to be keeping an eye on Frankie, and I’m actually supposed to be making sure that Sara doesn’t sneak into Nick’s dressing room to make out like we, as stated before, were just doing?” I finished, batting my eyelashes innocently.
            Joe smirked. “Yeah, but that’s not what we’re going to tell you’re brother,” he replied in a singsong voice. He swung the door open and shoved me outside, then swiftly closed it behind me, leaving me alone and defenseless against “the wrath of an extremely pissed off, overly protective” Alex.
            I turned and banged my fist against the door. “You suck!” I called, smiling through the slight irritation I felt towards him.
            “Love you!” he was his muffled response. I rolled my eyes, then turned and made my way down the hallway in search of Alex. Whatever it was that he was so pissed about better have been good because he’d just interrupted the best hour and half of my life.

Quote is from "Find Myself in You" by...someone, lol.


love kevin.
loveloveLOVE nick.
♥ joe siggiess ;)
The Hands of Time; fic by Jazz (:
^click it!^
i survived cherub bootcamp (:
She loves the sun 'cause it proves she's not alone, and the world doesn't revolve around your soul. She loves the sky 'cause it validates her pride; never lets her know when she is wrong. And the black keys never looked so beautiful. And a perfect rainbow never seemed so dull. And the lights out never had this bright a glow. And the black keys are showin' me a world I never knew.
07.29.09 ♥
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