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 11/4/2009 5:33 PM
 
 Modified By danicor88  on 11/16/2009 6:40:02 AM

Hi!

I'm Dani, and I'm new here. I am Peruvian, which is why my english is not really perfect. I have not finished writting the first chapter, but i know that if i post the introdcution, i will most likely be more motivated to write faster. PLEASE COMMENT!

Thanks.

Breaking the rules

Introduction:

Rules of vacations
1. do everything you can’t do at home
2. party and have fun
3. meet new people (Mostly boys)
4. Do not fall in love with any of them.

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 11/5/2009 12:45 PM
 
 Modified By danicor88  on 11/5/2009 11:49:49 AM

Chapter 1: The day

“Den!” called my mom. “Are you ready?”
“Just about” I shouted back.
I grinned as I finished packing and heard my mother rant to my dad because I was doing everything at the last minute. Truth is, I try not to procrastinate, but it had been almost impossible not to. I had returned from the mall that afternoon and only just started packing. I didn’t know what to take to my vacation to the US, so I had gone shopping with my cousin. Who could blame me? I mean, I am 21 years old, after all.
“Denise!” called my mom. “Hurry up! We have to pick up Adri!”
“I’m ready!” I answered as I closed my second suitcase.
Today was a special day. My cousin Adrianne, who’s almost 21 and me, were going to go on a trip to the US alone. I had not been there since I was 15, so I was very excited. Adrianne has a friend called Kathy there, and we were going to meet up with her and her rich friends. Adri and I are Peruvians, and we are best friends too, we do everything together. We had planned this trip and saved for it for one year. And we were finally going to go to New Jersey for one whole month. Our aunt who lives in North Carolina, was coming to spend a week with us, but then, it was me, Adri and Kathy, who would be with us for 2 weeks.
“Daddy!” I called. “Would you help me?”
My dad came into my room with my younger brother, who’s 18. They grabbed one suitcase each and headed towards the garage to put my luggage in the trunk. As we drove to Adri’s house, which was only five minutes away, I couldn’t help but smile. This over exceeded my expectations. I had always wanted to travel without my parnts, and now, over 21, legal in every single corner of the world, I would be traveling with my best friend.
When we picked up Adri, she came running, with his dad behind her, carrying her suitcases. She hugged me excitedly.
“Guess what?” she said, and before I had a chance to answer, she continued “Kathy’s coming with Dave and Jonathan”
I understood her excitement. Dave was Kathy’s brother and my cousin had a crush on him. Jonathan was Kathy’s boyfriend. So yay for me, I was going to be playing the violin for them most of the trip. On the other hand, I was most probably going to meet her cute friends.
“And she says she has a huge surprise for us!” she added
“What?” I asked
“I don’t know, she said we were going to meet some people and we were going to be blown away by them”
I clapped, exited. So I was right. We were going to meet some cool, hot, awesome hot guys. Suddenly, I would not wait to get down from that plane and start partying.


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 11/6/2009 3:59 PM
 

awww

come on, is it too bad?


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 11/7/2009 9:15 AM
 

it's good and so is your english, only a few mistakes. keep writing!


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 11/8/2009 10:40 AM
 
 Modified By danicor88  on 11/16/2009 6:38:27 AM

Chapteer 2: SURPRISE!

Later that night, my cousin and I were getting ready to go out with Kathy. Finally, she was going to reveal the big secret she had for us, and I was extremely exited to know what it was. Adri and I had tried to talk it out of her, but she never told us, and tonight we were going to find out!

So I stood in front of the bathroom.

I stared at the bathroom door.

I looked at my watch.

And I looked back up at the door.

I kicked the bathroom door.

“Would you hurry up?” I asked, irritated. “I also want to get ready!”

“Hold on a second!” shouted my cousin back from inside. She didn’t seem upset at me for shouting. In fact, she giggled.

Of course, that only made me angrier

“What are you laughing at?”I asked as I knocked on the door for the tenth time. “Open the door, Adrianne!”

“Ok, ok!” she finally said, and opened up. “Ta dah!”

She posed in front of me and smiled. She really did look breath taking. She was a pretty girl but today she had really gotten inspired. She looked so nice that my anger vanished in that moment.

“Oh wow, Adri, you look amazing. If this does not get Dave’s attention, you’re screwed”.

She laughed and hit me playfully.

I went into the bathroom and soon realized that there was nothing much for me to do. I am not a person who wears make up, maybe a bit or eyeliner, but that is it. I looked at myself in the mirror. I looked nice. I had a pair of black leggings and high heels, and a long, loose, short-sleeved shirt. I had straightened my hair, but left curls in the end.

Not long after I got in, I was out of the bathroom

“That’s what you made such a big scandal for?” Adri said, widening her eyes “Are you crazy?”

“Oh, you’re exaggerating” I said, shaking my head.

In that instant Kathy walked into our room.

“Ready?” she said.

“Yep” we answered at the same time.

“Time to go then” she said, going out the door, almost as fast ash she ca in. I grabbed y jacket and my purse and ran after her, followed closely by Adrianne.

“So where are we going?” I asked, trying to keep up with her.

“To meet up with one of my very best friends, who actually lives here”

“Who?” asked Adrianne.

“Cameron Jonas” she said. “She’s the Jonas Brothers cousin”

“Wow. Really?” asked Adri, surprised

“Yeah. Remember the surprised I told you about?”

“Yessss” I said, suddenly exited. I had a suspicion of who we were going to meet.

“You’re meeting the Jonas Brothers” she said as if it was nothing.

“WHAT?” we both asked at the same time. I was right!

“Yeah, Cam and I are really really close. When I told her I was coming here she said we could go to their concerts for free and stuff. I already met them before. They are really down to earth”

“Oh Lucy and Natalie will hate us!” commented Adri. Her sisters, who were 15 and 17, loved the JB.

I nodded. Truth to be told, I had never been that much of their fan. Sure, they were incredibly cute, and their music was really good, but I don’t know why, I had never been too fan of them. Anyway, the idea of meeting them was still like a dream come true. I had wondered many times when I saw them in the MTV’s, when I saw their show or something, what would it be lik to meet them.

And now, I was going to meet them. This was something any girl would die for and I was going to get it. I clapped, as I do when I’m excited.

I was sure that tonight would be a life changing night, and I couldn’t wait for it.


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 11/16/2009 7:42 AM
 

Chapter 3: Nick Jonas.

“That was an awesome concert” said Kathy as she hugged the boys. They laughed in a dismissing way, truly humble.
“Boys, these are Adri” said Cam, as she pointed to my cousin “and Debbie” and pointed at me.
“Hi” we both said shyly. I heard Dave and Jonathan chuckle at our shyness.
“Hey” they replied in unison and shook our hands. That was still weird for my cousin and me, since in Peru we say goodbye and hello with a peck on the cheek.
I looked at the smiling Jonas. They were tall. But then again, I’m 5’0, so almost anyone is tall for me. All of them had very intense and piercing eyes. A girl came soon after and held Kevin’s hand. That must be Danielle, I thought. They looked very much in love. I smiled for myself as they walked in front of us, to get into the limo that would take us to the disco, giggling and hugging. That’s why I had come here to take time to myself.
After a 10 minute ride, we finally got to the disco. Instantly, we were taken to a private VIP room. Inside, was Demi Lovato. When he saw her, Joe hugged her and kissed her softly. I had heard rumors of their relationship, but didn’t know if it was actually true. After brief introductions, the couple left the room to go to the dance floor. They were soon followed by Kevin and Danielle, and Kathy and Jonathan. I noticed Adri eyeing Dave and then looking at the room’s door. He smiled, grabbed her hand and followed her sister. Cam had met her boyfriend a few minutes ago and now they went down too. I stood up and sat down again by the room’s window, which looked to the dance floor.
“Hi” I heard someone say. I looked up. Nick Jonas was there with me.
“Hey” I replied smiling.
He stood up and came to sit down next to me.
“It’s Debbie, right?”
“Yeah. And you’re Nick?” I said, making a lame joke.
He laughed “Yeah”
I couldn’t help noticing he had the most beautiful smile I had ever seen. And beautiful eyes too. He took a sip from his diet coke as he looked out the window to the happy couples dancing to a slow song downstairs. I, on the other hand, didn’t take my eyes away from him. His perfect jaw looked almost as if he was clenching his teeth through his tightly closed mouth. He had his eyes semi closed, like in all those pictures I had seen of him on the internet. I tilted my head sideways to take a better look. He was holding something, like a chain around his neck, and I assumed it was his dog tag. I had heard he had diabetes of type 1. I remembered when I was younger and ate my grandfathers’ candy and chocolates… those specially made for diabetic people. I shook my head smiling; I bet he bought more than necessary because I ate most of HIS candy.
“What?” he suddenly asked, looking at me, smiling.
“Oh, nothing. I was just…” I stopped, wondering how he would take it if I made a comment about how he reminded me of my passed away grandfather.
“It’s ok, you can tell me”
“It’s nothing, it’s just that you reminded me of someone, when I saw your dog tag” I said finally, nodding towards the silver chain around his neck.
He didn’t stop smiling “Really? Who?” He seemed truly curious.
“My grandfather. He had diabetes too. When I was a kid I would always eat all his candy and his chocolates. But he didn’t mind” I said. “He passed 7 years ago of old age”
“I’m sorry” he said, reaching out to touch my hand.
“Thanks. It’s ok” I said smiling brightly at him.
God. He’s so sexy. Somebody should punish him for it.
He’s too young to be that sexy.
He should be like 5 years older.
Dammit.
We stayed silent once again. Typical, when you meet someone new, and suddenly you run out of topics to talk about. And he was a superstar. What could interest him of my boring life?
“So” he finally said, looking out the window again. “Is your cousin going out with Dave?” he asked.
“No” I asked confused. Was he interested in her? “Why?”
“She’s making out with him”
“NO!” I said surprised. I looked out the window. “YES!!”I shouted happily. “She’s liked him for a few years now!” I clapped.
He laughed at my excitement. “You seem truly happy”
“Of course I am” I said smiling widely.
“Do you have a boyfriend?” he asked suddenly.
Oh no. He did not just ask that. My least favorite topic of conversation. We could talk about the weather. We could talk about plate tectonics; we could talk about Volcanoes, sports, Marketing, Peru, USA, hell we could even talk about Music. But NO. He has to go and ask me if I have a boyfriend.
“No” I said, unsmiling “I don’t”
“Do you want to talk about it?”
Wow. Any other guy would have started interrogating me. Almost like a woman would. Or if not, they would start with their “who would ever hurt/leave/cheat on/ not want/ etc a girl like you?” catch phrase.
“Not really”
“Ok” he said, nodding. “I understand”
“Thanks” I said smiling again. He winked. I almost fell off the couch.
This kid knew he had some sort of power over females. And he was using it on me. And it was working.

************

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