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 10/7/2008 4:32 PM
 
 Modified By Ginny [with liberty and Jonas for all] West  on 11/3/2008 9:36:15 AM

Alright, so this could technically be about any of them--I didn't use names.  But the song is "True Believer" by Jimmy Wayne (surprise surprise).  The words in italic are the words of the song.  The words in bold are from the past.  I really hope you like it.

TRUE BELIEVER

Nobody but me to blame
For losing all this love
Hope is the greatest expectation
And I never knew how to give up
 
            He turned the ring over in his hand. Her ring. The ring he’d spent hours and hours trying to find. The one he’d slipped on her finger the day of their wedding. The one she handed back to him because she no longer loved him.
            “I’m sorry.” She whispered. “I just, I can’t do this anymore.”
            “Sorry? For what? Breaking my heart or finding someone else?” He slammed down the phone. He took one last look at the ring in his hand before throwing it against the far wall of the room. It bounced and landed somewhere among the shattered glass of picture frames and torn shreds of old love letters.
 
Hand full of promises I can’t hold
Old love letters that just lie
You might have tried to break me down
You might have seen me cry
 
My dearest love,
 
            I cannot tell you how happy I am that there’s only a few weeks left in your tour. I know you and your brothers are doing what you love, but I miss you so much when you leave. 
            I spend my days with you on my mind. I’ve got a huge calendar set up in the kitchen and I cross off the days, so I know just how long I have to wait till you’re back in my arms.
You are my world, and you always will be. I just know you and I will be together forever. We are soul-mates.
 
Love Always
 
I-I’m not foolish and I’m not blind
I did what I could
I stood in the rain
And I waited for love to be kind
With a heart that didn’t die
It just feels a litter deeper
So don’t worry ‘bout me
Cause more than anything
I am a true believer
 
            “I’m not sure I can do this anymore.” She said.
            “Why not?” He pleaded. She was his world, and now she was saying goodbye?
            “It hurts when you’re not here. I hate that I never see you. I miss having you around. I just can’t do this long distance thing anymore.”
            “Please don’t walk away from this. Please don’t walk away from me. I will do anything…” She sighed. “I will quit touring if that’s what it takes to keep you with me.”
            “Are you serious?” She squealed and jumped into his arms. He smiled in relief.
 
I get up every day
I think of you more than I should
I won’t let you disgrace
The whole human race
I believe people are good
 
            “Get up!” He heard the shout, and attempted to drown it out by pulling his pillow over his ears. “I’m not kidding, get out of that bed, before I drag you out.” Reluctantly, he sat up. He knew his brother wasn’t joking. He looked in the direction of the voice. Correction: brothers.
            “You can’t keep moping about. It’s been over a year since she left.” Like 12 months was supposed to lessen the pain of having one’s heart ripped out.
            “Can’t you guys leave me alone? I’m sure you can find someone else to bother.” He said angrily.
            “Look,” Oh goody, here comes the serious talk. “We love you. This is not the end of the world for you. We’re not saying you need to start dating again, or even that we should go back on tour. What we are saying is that you cannot throw away your whole life over this. You know that just because she broke your heart doesn’t mean that everyone is out to do the same.”
            “I know that, but…”
            “No buts. Get out of bed and get dressed. We’re all gonna go out for breakfast.” He sighed in frustration, but followed the directions he’d been given.
 
I-I’ll just say it was all for the best
I won’t compromise
And I won’t close my eyes
And pretend I can live with less
I’ll just say goodbye
To the way I thought that we were
Don’t worry ‘bout me
Cause more than anything
 
            He made his way through the club full of dancing people. He didn’t feel like dancing, or “listening” to the deafening music. But he didn’t feel like being at home where all he had were his memories. Somehow, despite the atmosphere he was surrounded in, he felt his phone vibrate in his pocket. He pulled it out to see that he received a text message. From her.
 
--Hey.
He wasn’t sure if he should respond. It had taken almost two years for him to finally resemble a human again. He opted not to, and after a few minutes of watching the people around him having fun, he felt it vibrate again.
--I know you don’t want to hear this, but I miss you.
His heart dropped. He was about to hit the ‘reply’ button, when he instead, shut his phone and pushed his way out of the club.
 
I believe in a love that’s bigger than us
I believe it so strong that I just gotta trust
I give all that I have
I believe it so much
 
            “It’s good to see you again.”
            “You too. It feels weird being back in here, you know, after…” The old man just shook his head with a smile.
            “There’s a place for you in the House of the Lord, no matter what happens. Don’t ever forget that. He’s always watching out for you, son.”
 
I-I believe in something heavenly
With all the mistakes
And the pain that love takes
I still believe in what it could be
There’s a Godly sound
Talking to all us sinners
So don’t worry ‘bout me
Cause that’s all that I need
No, don’t worry ‘bout me
Cause that’s all that I need
I am a true believer
 
            “Are you ok, mister?” He blinked a few times to readjust his vision. In front of him stood a girl, no more than five years old. She had been poking him on his arm.
            “Yes, I’m ok.” He attempted to smile at her, but he didn’t have the strength of heart to do so. “Where’s your mommy?” He sat up on the bench and glanced around the small park.
            “She’s in heaven. So is my daddy.”
            “So, you’re all by yourself here in the park?” He asked, alarmed. The world was too crazy of a place to let a five year old wander off alone.
            “No, ‘cause you’re here.” She said it like it was the most obvious thing in the world. “But, why are you so sad?” She took one of his hands and held it in both of hers.
            “Well, I was feeling pretty alone, but now you’re here.” She grinned, and he couldn’t help but grin back at her. He talked to the little girl for quite a while. About anything and everything that came to his mind. He told her how horrible things had been for him the last few years of his life. About his brothers, and his career. About her. “I don’t really know why I’m telling you all of this.” He said.
            “It’s ok, mister. I’m a good listener. Can I come visit you again? I hear my mommy calling me.” He looked at her, puzzled.
            “But you said…” And with that, she seemed to vanish in front of his eyes.
 
Nobody but me to blame
For losing all this love
Hope is the greatest expectation
And I never learned how to give up

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 10/7/2008 6:12 PM
 

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 10/7/2008 6:35 PM
 

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 10/7/2008 8:44 PM
 

OK, just ONE reply?  PLEASE...Pretty please?  You can even tell me you hate it...I can take it...I'm tough  *SOBS* WHY WONT ANYONE REPLY...JK, only not really cause someone needs to reply


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 10/7/2008 8:52 PM
 

One reply coming up!

This was awesome ;; sad, beautiful, touching. Brava. ;)


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 10/7/2008 10:05 PM
 

so u only wanted 1 reply? dus that mean i cant comment???

well if it dus then U WILL GET OVER IT SISTER!!!

cuz i am.

that was reli good! =]


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 10/7/2008 10:21 PM
 

Yay...two comments...I lurve you gals.  You're awesome!!!


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 10/7/2008 10:25 PM
 

Ginny!!!!!!!!! I loved it!!!! It was so sad but it was really really good! =)

For some reason I pictured Kevin. Haha.

 

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 10/7/2008 10:53 PM
 

I actually wasn't picturing any of JB...I don't really know who I was picturing.  Originally, I was going to do it from a girl's pov and have one of the JB be the heart breaker.  But then I thought, psh.  Why not?  So yeah.  TY  I am so glad you like it


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 10/11/2008 12:39 PM
 
Hey, Ginny. :)

I thought that since you're such an amazing reader/commenter you'd probably have a similar consistency of amazing in your writing. And yes, yes you do.

While this is a little strange, it's for a good reason, it's not really the "ordinary" fan fiction.

I, of course, youtubed the song to listen to whilst I read this and it definitely added a specific tone to the story that I loved. Kind of coincidentally, the speed with which I read between the lyrics seemed to match up almost perfectly with the length of the song. It was kind of crazy.

So, as weird of a compliment as this may be, I like the fact that you didn't use names. Since the ambiguity of it made it so it truly could have been any of them, it's very versatile for anyone who wants to read it. They can just implement the Jonas of their choice into the story and wahlah it's perfect. In fact, if you hadn't put in the "brothers" it really could have been any band anyone wanted it to be. It was up to the readers interpretation, which was really cool.

The whole thing was really well written. The descriptions you used in certain places really added to the story. Specifically, I like how you describe hands. First, with the ring, and then towards the end, with the little girl. I'd say it's practically symbolism- that is, if I were assigned to write a three page paper on your one-shot for English... which I'm not... but anyway. I liked it.

I also like the passage of time in this oneshot. While that's the only part that confused me, because I can't really tell how old he is at certain points, it didn't affect my experience reading this as a whole.

All in all, this was great, and I've spent too much time commenting you back and not writing my story so I'll end this comment now.

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