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New Post 8/26/2008 6:12 PM
User is offline Arem
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Voicemail (ff one-shot. Comments make the world go round!) 
Modified By Arem  on 8/27/2008 12:03:49 PM)

I am in the throes of writer's block on my main story (see siggy link, yay-rah), so I wrote my first one-shot!

Honestly, I don't think too much of it, but I thought I'd throw it out there. If anything, please comment on the format/style. I'm curious to see if it works, or if it's just confusing.

 

Voicemail

 

Hey, Cara, this is Nick… um, the other night was really fun, and I wanted to see, well, call me back when you can. I wanna talk to you.”

~.~

“Hey Nick, it’s Cara. I know I just talked to you, but I lost your email. Could you send it again?... oh, and thanks. For lunch, and for the flower. You’re really sweet—okay, bye.”

~.~

“Cara, your away message is annoying! Are you ever going to change it? Anyway, I just wanted to know what happened last night, make sure you made it home okay. So, um, call me back tomorrow? I miss you already. Sweet dreams. Bye.”

“Hey Cara, this is Joe. Um, about last night… Look, can we talk? Gimme a call back.”

~.~

“Hey, Joe. Sorry I had to go earlier. What I was going to say was, I don’t want to hurt your brother’s feelings. Nick has been really nice to me, you know? Please understand. It’s not that I don’t want to go out with you… look, I’ll talk to you later.”

~.~

“Joe. I know you have your phone. Answer. Look, I heard you kissed Cara last night… It had better not be true, man, or you are so dead. Call. Me. Back.”

“Cara? Hey…we need to talk. Please call me back.”

“Hey, Joe, I was just calling to see if you’ve talked to Nick yet… yeah. I think he found out. So, that’s kind of a problem. Just let me know what he says to you, Joe. I don’t know what to do. Bye.”

“Aagh. Gosh, Cara, don’t hang up on me like that! Look, I’m not trying to be mean. I just…I felt this connection with you, you know? You’re amazing, and beautiful… please, give me a chance. Nick will get over it, I promise. He doesn’t stay mad long. Everything will be fine. …So, if you want to call me back, that’s great. Just don’t hang up again, please. Love you? Bye.”

“Nick? Nick, I’ve called you three times. I’m so, so sorry. I didn’t mean to… to hurt your feelings. The thing with Joe, I just… he caught me off-guard, you know? Look, I know this is such a line, and people say it to get rid of people… but I don’t mean it that way. I want to be friends, Nick. I don’t want to lose you, and I don’t want you to be mad at me. Just, please call me back. Let me get a word in. And, please don’t fight with Joe about it. I don’t want to come between you guys. Well, maybe I already did. Just, tell me what I can do to make it better. I feel like crap. Sorry.”

“Hey. Mom wants to know where you are. So come home. Bye.”

“Hey Cara, it’s Joe. Um, do you know where Nick is? Call me back if you’ve heard from him.”

“Mom, it’s Cara. I just wanted to let you know that I’m going to go look for Nick Jonas. His family can’t find him. I’ll call you when I’m about to come home, or you can call me whenever. Love you. Bye.”

“Mom… oh my God, Mom. I don’t know what to… what to… oh my God, her car. She’s—there was—accident—they won’t let me—just please come—ambulance is here...”

“Hey Kev… this is Joe. We’re at the—the hos-hospital right now. You might wanna come… bye.”

~.~

“Joe, it’s me. Today’s her birthday. I wanted to see if you wanted to do something. I was going to go visit. Maybe we could do it together. I love you. Bye.”

“Hey, little brother. I just wanted to say thank you for yesterday. You’re… a really special person, Nick. When we were at her grave, and you were telling me it was going to be okay, even though you were in as much pain as I was. Maybe more. You could have blamed me, but I’m so glad you didn’t…I just can’t even say how blessed I am to have you as a brother, and that we’re pulling through this together. I think it would have made Cara really happy, you know? To see us acting like brothers again, instead of mortal enemies. …Okay. This is hard, and I don’t think it’s going to get easier soon. I just wanted to tell you that I will always be here for you, and I love you. Gosh, my voice is cracking. I’ll talk to you later...”

 

 



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New Post 8/26/2008 6:33 PM
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Re: Voicemail (ff one-shot) 

I like how you chage the person speaking with the colors. Thats a was good. It made me cry towrds the end. =( But it was very good

Amy


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New Post 8/26/2008 7:10 PM
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Re: Voicemail (ff one-shot) 

 Dancinangel91 wrote

I like how you chage the person speaking with the colors. Thats a was good. It made me cry towrds the end. =( But it was very good

Amy

Aw, thanks Amy! I'm glad the colors helped.

Anyone else? Comments, criticism, random thoughts?


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New Post 8/26/2008 9:25 PM
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*Bump*


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New Post 8/26/2008 9:41 PM
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Re: Voicemail (ff one-shot) 

wow amazing story. cried at the end though


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New Post 8/26/2008 10:16 PM
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Re: Voicemail (ff one-shot) 

Thank you, Jesika!...Wow, is it really making people cry? I guess I can take that as a compliment...unless they're the miserable, unhappy sort of tears. If that's the case, sorry! :)


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New Post 8/27/2008 12:38 AM
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*bedtime bump* Night, peeps.


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New Post 8/27/2008 12:42 AM
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Re: Voicemail (ff one-shot) 

 Dancinangel91 wrote

I like how you chage the person speaking with the colors. Thats a was good. It made me cry towrds the end. =( But it was very good

Amy

I got to the end and almost cried too.

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New Post 8/27/2008 3:12 AM
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Re: Voicemail (ff one-shot) 
Modified By Chickafilla [says Nick J all the way]  on 8/27/2008 1:13:48 AM)

this was great

i liked how you put it only in voicemails

that was a good idea

 

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New Post 8/27/2008 1:50 PM
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Modified By Arem  on 8/27/2008 12:17:40 PM)

Thanks for your comments, gals!

 Chickafilla [says Nick J all the way] wrote

i liked how you put it only in voicemails

that was a good idea

 

Yay, I'm glad you liked it!!


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