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 9/6/2008 11:10 AM
 
 Modified By LauraJonas♥  on 11/2/2008 10:52:12 AM

okayyy, so this is my first ff, i thought id give it a go at writing one, and if it doesnt turn out all that great hey, i gave it a go! this is just an opening paragraph for now, i guess you could call it a prologue? please tell me what you think and ill write more if anyone likes it. comments are really appreciated and id love to know what you think about it.

 

 

Some Things Never Change, Some Things You Can't Escape 

                 It was late, Claire breathed in heavily as she stared across her empty room. She couldn't sleep, she hadn't been able to sleep for a week now, she didn't even want to sleep, she couldn't escape in her dreams like everyone else, because every bit of pain she felt when she was awake, haunted her in her sleep. The only difference between sleep and being awake was that when she was awake she managed to mask it all behind a smile, she sometimes could forget, maybe just for a second, but not when she was alone, never when she was alone. She slid off her bed and reached for her cell phone, there was one person she could call, one person she wanted to call, one person she'd called every night for a week, although she knew there'd be no answer, every single night there’d be no answer. But still, she dialed the number, stood there just listening to the answer machine; it always made Claire feel so much better, just to hear that voice, even if... A silent tear slid slowly down her face as she glanced at her alarm clock. "2.30am, I wish I could sleep, I'm so sorry," she whispered, "I'm so sorry." she repeated again to herself as she returned to her bed, she exhaled a large amount of air then pulled the covers over her head. She knew she wasn’t going to be able to sleep, but she had to get back into her bed, just incase her mother checked on her, she didn’t want to face her, she told herself so many times that she was never going to utter a word to her, never.






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 9/6/2008 11:15 AM
 

This sounds really good. It's very intriguing! I hope you continue posting! =)

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 9/6/2008 11:18 AM
 

haha thanks! :p
btw incase you were confused by the repetitiveness of it, its like that cause its partly to show what shes feeling/thinking, its not going to be like that all the way through haha :')






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 9/6/2008 11:26 AM
 

It's okay, I like it. I think it emphasizes important thoughts or feelings. =) (LOL I think that's what you said too haha!) Post more soon? =)

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 9/6/2008 11:27 AM
 

okayy ^^ i thought after i read it through it might be a bit confusing but i thought id post it anywayyyy!
im gonna wait to see if i get anymore comments, im gonna write the first chapter now and ill post it when i get more commentsss.






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 9/6/2008 11:32 AM
 
 Modified By LauraJonas♥  on 9/6/2008 10:32:43 AM

eek double post.






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 9/6/2008 11:45 AM
 

allow the lack of replies :p
if it sucks just tell me baha ^^ x






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 9/6/2008 12:02 PM
 

bump 0:]]






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 9/6/2008 12:11 PM
 

This sounds so intriguing already!

POST MORE VERY SOON!

haha


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 9/6/2008 12:36 PM
 

haha thankyou :p

im just about to post chapter 1 now, theres not too much going on yet, its just introduction of characters and such but itll pick up very soon (;






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